story of a kid in the world of magic
The Blind Eternities forum
Posted on Aug. 14, 2014, 10:53 a.m. by poeticdegree
I never knew I had these abilities to cast such great spells until now it comes to me as a surprise its weird and unsettling I don't know what to say i'm scared for what I can do for who I can summon i've always heard of people called planeswalkers but id never imagine becoming one I mostly I hid through the day staying dormant from people but I always run into your average bum or two and I try not to hurt them I really try but I want to eat I was taught that being a war orphan and all being all alone in the world its every one for them self im so young and so alone fending for my self with my abilities I don't understand and control
poeticdegree says... #3
I know I wrote this all in a rush im in school in class
August 14, 2014 11:44 a.m.
poeticdegree says... #4
I never knew I had these abilities to cast such great spells until now it comes to me as a surprise its weird and unsettling I don't know what to say Im scared for what I can do for who I can summon Ive always heard of people called planes walkers but Id never imagine becoming one I mostly I hid through the day staying dormant from people but I always run into your average bum or two and I try not to hurt them I really try but I want to eat I was taught that being a war orphan and all being all alone in the world its everyone for them self Im so young and so alone fending for myself with my abilities I don't understand and control
August 14, 2014 11:47 a.m.
derKochXXL says... #6
Punctuation matters ;) Is this going to be the start for a short story? I like your style. I have one question though lore wise. Do Planeswalker inherently know how to do magic? I thought the only thing making them special was the planeswalking and their spells were the result of their former learning.
August 14, 2014 1:11 p.m.
Rhinowarrior says... #8
Amusing how the one labeled poetic degree has such poor grammar:D Nice story
August 14, 2014 3:57 p.m.
Rhinowarrior says... #11
I was actually born with a facial disfiguration that makes me resemble the lovechild of a mimeoplasm and quasimotto. I am very open about it. Kids at school taunt me and call me troll-child. Magic is the only thing that I can ever look forward to...
August 14, 2014 4:07 p.m.
poeticdegree says... #12
okay cool story bro but did u enjoy my fan fiction
August 14, 2014 4:10 p.m.
Gorgosaurusrex says... #13
I may have enjoyed it if the spelling, grammar, and punctuation were correct. I'm not really a fan of reading one long run-on sentence and having it called "fan fiction".
Perhaps you shouldn't post stuff like this when you are in class. Maybe paying attention in class instead of writing would improve your spelling and grammar.
August 14, 2014 4:31 p.m.
GlistenerAgent says... #16
I enjoyed the concept, but I was not a huge fan of the writing style, in addition to the lack of proper grammar. It's a little choppy for my taste.
Keep at it. Also, pay attention in class. What you do there is infinitely more important than what you do here.
Critics are the only people who can help you get better.
August 20, 2014 8:56 p.m.
Rhinowarrior says... #17
Yes, I enjoyed the fan fic sir. Forgot to respond earlier:/
August 20, 2014 9:57 p.m.
Rhinowarrior says... #18
My uncle often tells me, that with great power, comes a greater responsibility. That is, he often told me. All I remember were the flashes, bright, blinding me. No literally I was blinded. The doctors couldn't tell my family what happened. No one could. I took to the streets to find a home. Somewhere I could be accepted. That is how I came to prowl the streets dressed as a red devil. Fighting crime, but more importantly, fighting evil. Yet, somehow a piece of me was still missing. No it was not my eyes. It was deeper, hurt more than that. My struggles brought me to a mansion where there were others of my kind. The professor, or so they called him, taught me to use my ability's to make the world a better place. A world where the people would accept me. I came here to find peace. But all I found was sorrow. Lost in the voids of nyx, cast into eternal darkness, dwindling...
To be continued...
August 20, 2014 10:06 p.m.
TheRedDude says... #19
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brandontraps says... #2
Grammar makes all the difference.
August 14, 2014 11:35 a.m.