UR/MS: The Mystery of Markov Manor
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Posted on March 30, 2016, 11:30 a.m. by GoldGhost012
WARNING: Story may contain trace amounts of what-the-hell-is-going-on.
shinobigarth says... #3
changing perspectives is generally a no-no in creative writing.
March 30, 2016 12:34 p.m.
GoldGhost012 says... #4
It is effective if done well. Sadly I think this one was just too sudden and jarring, removing effectiveness.
"Jace stood outside the manor.
I'm wandering the halls of this giantass place being assaulted by dead psychic vampiric memories."
March 30, 2016 12:59 p.m.
I'm beginning to think that Emmy isn't the big bad here, and this article proves it. Mind-warping is Kozilek's business, not Emrakul's.
March 30, 2016 2:37 p.m.
You might say getting a glimpse of Jenrik in daddy Markov's time was an example of the aeons being torn.
Emrakul being tangent to the plane might also explain why Jace feels a hunger in the void at the end of the article- eldrazi are hungry things that come from the space between planes. Being undetectable would be new though: Ob Nixilis could feel the ego for Kozilek when he was borrowing eldrazi spawn.
March 30, 2016 3:21 p.m.
SSJ_Weegee says... #8
So, what I got from this is that the vampires' and Jenrik's memories were still active after death. This caused Jace to go crazy because he couldn't detect them with their being dead. Is this right, or am I missing something?
March 30, 2016 5:19 p.m.
asasinater13 says... #9
what if Nahiri is just harnessing people's soul/mind/presence, using the cryptoliths to collect their "presence" for... something?
March 30, 2016 7:56 p.m.
DemonDragonJ says... #10
This story is another transitory story, in which not much actually happens; the story is merely building toward something else happening, later.
I was very displeased that the story immediately had Jace arriving at Markov Manor, after he departed from Liliana in the previous story; are we, the readers, supposed to believe that his journey there was boring and uneventful?
The change from third-person to first-person was poorly-executed, to me, and I also wished that the actual destruction of the manor had been shown.
I was very glad that Edgar Markov was mentioned, by name, but the story did not reveal his ultimate fate; if he was killed in that attack, I shall be very angry, since everything that has been said about him implies that he is immensely powerful, and would not be defeated easily. I still am hoping for him to appear in the second set of this block.
How did Jace know that Sorin created Avacyn? As far as I know, Sorin has never revealed that information to anyone, but perhaps that information was in Tamiyo's journal, but, in that case, how could she possibly know that, since, again, Sorin is the only character in the story who knows that? That makes no sense, akin to how
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March 30, 2016 10:04 p.m.
JaceArveduin says... #11
So... "where the law of gravity was more like a guideline." That means we should keep to The Code if someone falls behind, right me mateys?
JWiley129 says... #2
The second half of the story was a really good, but the transition could've been done better imo. There's something to be said to change from 3rd-to-1st person with no warning, but I think I would've enjoyed the story more if it was entirely from 1st person perspective. If I were to rate it, I'd give it a 7/10. Good story, advanced the plot, made me feel panicked for Jace's mental state.
March 30, 2016 11:53 a.m.